Chapter 1 - pg 04
Aug 20, 2016
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Knowing Nina a little more (why not?)
Any English mistake? Please tell me!
(Thank you, people, you're helping me so much!)
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"...some mysterious disorder..." "...decided he should have his treatment in..."
I also have a slight problem with the statement;
"But, of tranquility, Nina never knew anything."
Which to me implies that she was not permitted to be tranquil.
To maintain the style of prose and also capture how I feel Nina is disposed, may I suggest;
"But this tranquility, Nina never desired to embrace."
(Personal opinion)
*edit* Reading on down, I see Amura has already addressed the mysterious typo XD
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