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Poetic Feels NV

Poems 6-10

Poems 6-10

Sep 26, 2018

6. N.Y.C (New Year Chain) by Wilson Palacios

Woman: What’s your resolution in this New Year?

Man: To be able to be a boss of a company

All: What’s your…..What’s your……What’s your…..What’s your…..What’s your…..What’s your…..What’s your

Me:……I don’t have one

All: What? Why?

Me:

Resolution, does it matter or will it matter

Is like you believe in every priest’s rapper

Does it bother you that we live in a chain?

As we lose more than we possibly gain

Don’t you know this will not end?

That there will be conflict that blend

But every year is little change of one thing

Just have to wait to that to be a bring

Man: What can you know what you say is true, Do your resolutions comes true?

Me:

Why believe in them if there will be blocks ahead

Like time to get there and love to achieve instead

But I don’t understand is why girls like bad boys

If they don’t appreciate them and use them as toys

This New Year Chain will bring hope and despair

Be ready as what you see so you best be prepare

To see what’s the tomorrow of this world order

We must live for today as time is getting shorter

Woman: Sounds like you know so much by your own experience, was it too much?

Me:

Is that people is trying to use me as a tool

And l almost thought being bad is cool

If you think getting jobs is easy, then you’re a fool

Like trap in a prison-like place they call it a school

No matter if we are young or old

We know what we have been told

So what we don’t know is untold

And we just have find it unfold

ALL: Why go so much, what your aim?

Me:

My aim is to have someone hear this poem

No matter who it is as long they exist

There are some things I just don’t know

And the answer leads to people coexist

I just hope it loosen the chain of the New Year

But it will not break unless something big is near

Does it mean I have a “revolution”, no I called it an action

Since no one knows if we achieve it or be an inaction

All:…Not even if you wanted a lover?

Me: It’s their choice if they want me or not, I’m not the one to talk first. I can wait, I have time…..I don’t know if they love me, since I’m shy to ask.

All: Will you get your answer?

Me:….in due time.


7. Mirror of Grief by Wilson Palacios

(Walking together in the sidewalk)

????: So where we going anyway?

(????): We going to the park silly, you always take me somewhere. I just wanted to do a favor

????: Why the park, there is nothing much to do in the park

(????): Have you forgotten, this the place we first meet each other

????: Oh, wait please don’t tell me it’s the anniversary of the time we meet, I forgot a gift.

(????): No silly its…….

Screeeeeeeeeeeee(car lose control)

“push”

CRASH

…..woken up in hospital

Liz(Zone)

Doctor come to talk

Doctor: I’m glad you are ok but I have bad news

Liz/Zone: What is it?

Doctor: Liz is Dead/Zone is Dead

(Few days later)

I can’t believe it in my eyes or my ears

That Liz is dead, the crush of my years

(This will not do I can’t accept this lie

My Zone could be in a coma you have to try)

Doctor: There is nothing I can do

(Next day)

Bully: Ha-ha crybaby, your friend is not around to protect you, now I give you a beating

(This is your father’s fault you idiot fool

My fist or my words, it’s going to be cruel.)

I will tell you this if your father ever gets out of jail

Then I will flip a coin to tell his fate head or tail.

Every time I see a mirror, I see you there sad

I should be the one to lose not you, my bad.

(This mirror of grief is hurting me seeing our past

I just hope he remembers before his life’s last.)

(Every time I pay at church, I wanted you back

But my light I gave to you its fading to black)

No matter how much I gamble, you not there

How can you see me when I can only see air?

This world feel empty without you here enjoying

Why didn’t you save yourself, it isn’t cloying

(I don’t know how close we was till you was gone

And now I will meet you there before tomorrow’s dawn)

(Why you still looking at me sad, you ungrateful friend

You risk your own life for mine, and this is how friend’s end)

Why mirror of grief, why you want to show what is true

That my selfish friend break me, well I will break you

“break”

-A letter appear

“Meet me in the park( there is something I have to show you”)

-walks to the park

-looking at the tree

I remember what I forget and I know why

Even in darkness, you’ll listen from the sky

(The promise I thought It never be true appears

My heart is at ease and my rage turn to tears)

-10 years ago

Why you planting here, this ground is not good here

(It will grow, one day it be beautiful and you see)

If you say so

(You just have to believe and it would grow)

How can I believe in one plant tree? Chance of it grow is slim

(Then let’s promise)

Promise?

(If the plants grows, I be your girlfriend)

Girlfriend?!

(Lol, your expression is funny)

…….If I’m your boyfriend, I will be there for you forever if I live or not.

(So it’s a promise)

-10 years later

Even when you are gone we keep our promise……

(I can’t say it officially but it’s true, like this tree…..)

Isn’t that right(Isn’t that right)

Girlfriend(Boyfriend)

8. Battleground by Wilson Palacios

This world is at war

No matter where we go

It’s already around us as we speak

For that our part of life that flow

I see around me are battle of love

I hear arguments of a child punishment

Watching cars racing each other for a simple cup

And that just some things in this continent

I see the road ahead of me fill with rage

Like it feels like a store from underground

But my path is in this way I can’t back out

I be walking through pain in this battleground

If you don’t believe me then that’s an argument

That’s one of many proves that it’s a battle

Look around you and you will see for your own eyes

You be a fool to not look at all of the example

It’s the will we have inside that wants it

Many reasons from a toy to getting that lover

What matter is that we are playing this game?

As life progresses, battles will be slaughter

I battle a few to where I stand

Some I won though effort others through teamwork

The loses are tough to forget

Since it’s the one we remember the most like classwork

I’ll be me as I keep battling

As I walk to find that lock to that key

I believe in that I will find it

Because there is nothing like me but me

No matter where I gone battles will be there

But to us it just a way to get a want to be crowned

I keep on going in this path because I was born to do

To the road of needs and wants in this battleground


9. Zero by Wilson Palacios

Walking in a town where love is sign of power, while those who doesn’t have it will be in life of torture.

People: What is this ugly beast, no wonder you are alone, no one will take you, in our town you’re just a no one, a complete “zero”.

-Oh really, you have to said all that in front of my face

That is just a disgrace, I just arrive and you want me erase

So this the town of love, well I just stay here a few days

Oh great they just decrease my stays, I just hope I get a raise.

-Looking around I see there is love shown here and there

This place I can compare, in New Year’s Eve in Times Square

I walking to restaurant and when I came to seat they move me

This is the land of the free, not the love of a single red tea

????: Scooter, what is it said on their affection level

Vegeta: “It’s over 9000?!”

-That’s complete bull, no love can be that perfect

How can you not expect when love itself can be a suspect

I see this one guy with one women, 30 mins later another one

To not notice this rerun, but this love town is only just begun

Zero hopes, Zero dreams, this boy will never succeed

No matter how much he feed, he will be mislead

Love is the only way the world will be safe from disaster

We are the master; you will not be as beautiful as china aster

-Day two of this town, someone approach me without rudeness

A young woman sees me other than useless, so thank goodness

She ask, “Why you are treated so poorly, you act different than others

You do have druthers, either leave this place or be with your brothers”

I said, “I will chose the third option and that is to stay for today

I have one more day, I can’t back away, so that’s all I can say”

She said “You have only today to leave or else they will kill you”

I have to say “If only that was true, this is where I have it due”

Why she telling me this, does she have feelings for me?

She is different I see, before I say what to say she flee

“Before you go, please tell me your name, I have to know”

“If you survive this death row, my name will be what I owe”

Zero this Zero that, you think I’m small like a street rat

What you have to said in this chat, you all house cat

You think I’m an easy target to be push around

Till I make a sound, hope you realized your confound

“This the day you going to leave both worlds today

You’re no good dismay that should be in a display

Love is true power in this world, so show respect

You’re just a side effect that needs to be reject”

What you going to do to me I have to see

Either beat me, choke me, hang me, or burn me

I may not have experience in love at least I understand

Before I get banned, I explaining why I have to withstand

What I see here isn’t love, it’s like playing a game

You play till your bored then rid of it to play another

I don’t see you serenade your woman, you just bang her

No trust, no say, you people go to one or the other

Maybe it’s a good thing being a Zero I’m just learning

So I don’t make the same mistake as you all are doing

Love is not perfect, love is just half of everything here

If you don’t understand that, then that will be your undoing

“When I close my eyes waiting for death, I open them and I’m in a middle of the forest.

Walking to the gas station, the manager told me that I pass the test. What test? I ask. If you think love is powerful or play with love, then you be trap there forever. But if you understand love or patient about it then you can escape of it. Before I leave the gas station, that same woman from the town appear and ask…….

Need a ride, you can’t walk all alone in this hassle

Sure but before that, what’s your name I survive the run

Called me Nicole, let’s go the road ahead is long so let’s enjoy it

There we go, I may be Zero I just wait before I’m her One.


10. Love letter by Wilson Palacios

-Until I fade from this world I date

Let me meet you again before I’m late

If you got a lover I just back away

As long we are friends that’s o kay-

If you are reading this letter I sent to you

Know this I glad cause it been too long due

Because I felt this best I do before I’m gone

Wherever we are gone we find again to bond

I remember the first time we have met I thought I die

Cause you look like an angel to my eyes I wonder why

Wanted to talk to you, to know you, but I’m just so shy

You are far away from me but you are two seats nearby

-Until I fade from this world I date

Let me meet you again before I’m late

If you got a lover I just back away

As long we are friends that’s o kay-

How can I get you notice me when I’m not bad

Not strong or wise but to help anytime I’m glad

Does it help that every time I willing to help, you want it better?

Go and wait for that guy that doesn’t even read your love letter

Wondering how can I know I be the one

If I never be with anybody and tell I won

Does jealousy in me tells me I don’t belong

I’m will not let that be there just for long

If I show you what I could do than just saying

Then this would have been a different explaining

Knowing this, I could be with you easier before

Always thinking of the past again to not be ignore

-Until I fade from this world I date

Let me meet you again before I’m late

If you got a lover I just back away

As long we are friends that’s o kay-

If you want to erase me, you can rip this letter in two

Not four, or eight, sixteen pieces you think will do

No matter how many you take away I will not fade

With all due respect, I’m alive while I be dissuade

Before I fade again from this world which I fail before

Let me meet you again in person before I’m ignore

If you got a lover I’m away, If It’s me then I’ll stay

You still be my friend again till the day we fade o kay.

palacioswilson
Apple (Wilson)

Creator

Poem 6-10 is here, what you guys think?

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Chocolatte
Chocolatte

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Okay, as promised; I read through all 10 poems before I could properly critique your writing. In my honest opinion, as a reader: I found the text to be nonchalant and boring at some part. I even skip a few lines and lose my interest at some of the more supposedly violence part. You yourself probably notice that there isn’t a lot of attentions and reviews on this particular comic. You mention wars, deaths, and losses; which are mature topics most of us didn’t experienced ourself, so it’s hard to relate to your writings. Like I mentioned before, I am an artist, so I can’t fully give you the critique a writer wants. However, as a reader: I found myself to be lost and wants to read something else because these adult topics I have not yet to went through myself. Are you writing this for yourself or to attract audience? I just wanted to point out these detrimental things in your comic because I don’t want you to continue something people aren’t excited for. The text is also too long for a poem, and more like a disconnected novel. People’s attention span is relatively short, so if you want to write poems: make them short and ambiguous. Anyway, I’m here to give you an honest critique from myself. You don’t have to listen to it; I say continue your passion! If you aren’t your own fan; how can you expect others to love your writing? :) Good luck! Don’t be afraid to be yourself and experience with different genres of writings. I wish you a nice day. <3

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