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The Haunted Store -short story-

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Nov 27, 2018

Nora looks at Jamil in disbelief. Jamil smiles proudly. “I know, I know… a nice girl like you doesn’t deserve a sister like that. You’re welcome.” Jamil expects a complement for his powers or perhaps a ‘thank you’.

“But, that’s horrible.” Nora says. Jamil is taken back by this. “I don’t want to forget my sister!”

“But, don’t you know what your ‘precious’ sister just told me? She begged me to take you instead of her!”

“She’s just terrified!”

“Don’t give her excuses. She is just a horrible person.” Jamil frowned.

“You don’t know her like I do. I want my sister Salma, and I will not leave without her.” Nora stomped her foot.

“Fine, if you insist.” Jamil said. The lights go out again. The short man disappeared along with the door.

“Wait!” Nora calls, but he was already gone.

Nora runs around cluelessly calling out for Jamil. She holds her phone out for light. She finds herself in the scented candles and incense section. She gets an idea. She grabs a handful of them. Now all she needs is a spark. A spark… how?

She aims her phone around trying to find anything she could use. Then, she looks at her own phone. She remembers the news years ago about an error that caused some phones to catch fire. Something in the battery perhaps. She thought of taking out her battery and cut it but she already lost her nail file. She can’t risk it. She has one phone and one chance.

She goes to the kitchens and grabs a microwave. She shoves the candles in the microwave and picks it up. She looks for an electric outlet. She finds one on the floor. She plugs the microwave in and it worked. She laughs in relief. As she suspected putting the candles in a microwave is not enough to light them on fire. They just melt. She has to sacrifice her phone.

She takes a deep breath and puts her phone inside. She turns the microwave on on high and watched the fireworks. The phone melts and sparks. Mini explosions are happening inside. When she opened the microwave’s door thick black smoke came out with the phone still burning.

She lights two candles with the flames. ‘This might be crazy enough to work’ she thinks. She stops to think for a bit on how she’s supposed to escape the fire with her sister, will this kill us all?

She decides she’ll just figure things out as they happen. She turns the microwave back on and then goes to find more flammable things.

“What are you doing?” She hears Jamil but doesn’t see him. “Stop!” He shouts. Nora lets everything she sees catch the flames. She lights a lamp with the candle. Then a couch with the lamp. She picks up the pillow off the couch and-

“You will regret this.” Jamil jumps in front of her. She panics and throws the flaming pillow at him. He is enveloped in fames faster than his own clothes his skin turns green and boils right before it melts. Nora screams as the creature morphs into something else. The whole store burns even where Nora never reached. Nora can barely breath. She coughs repeatedly desperate for air. The smoke is covering her vision.

***

Nora is lost in an empty parking lot of a burned building. She wonders how she got here. She looks for her phone but it’s not in her purse.

She thinks she might have forgot it at home.

She goes to the main road and takes a taxi home.

At home she opens her facebook. She finds an image of a girls she doesn’t know in a burned store. She finds the image creepy. She unfriends her.

chocolatteboss
Choco Boss

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This was a project for a subject. Again, there is a video summarizing it here https://youtu.be/ArObTIoJ-4U

I would like to hear your opinions and some helpful criticism maybe. This was the first time I write something like this. It's not really my taste cuz this was for a class anyway, but I do have some stories that I want to tell like this and will never have the time to draw them in comics. Would you like to read them? Should I do this again?

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mimi4o00
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I really liked the story, but you have to stick with one verb tense. It can be either past or present. When you write a story that has happened before you use past tense. In this case it should be only present tense. Not a mixture of the tenses because it gets confusing

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