This is a prologue which gives a brief outline of the war that happened 500 years ago . . . . .
after that it fast forwards to present day and introduces to readers to world as it is today and how damaged its become due to the new king DARIUS . . . . .
after that it focuses on a raid performed by Aaron and his team on a warehouse/fortress gaurded by a few rebellion members . . . .
here Aaron elects to single handedly beat them while telling is team to wait outside ( to take out his frustration ofcourse as today was the day that his sister died ) . .
after rather quickly rapping up his battle he is joined by his secretary who tries to lighten his mood when seemingly works but while leaving he thanks her for that effort to which she realizes that he already knew . . . . . .
after this he reminiscence of his sisters death he goes to the order headquaters to welcome their newest member and a new threat in the form of MARCO . .. . . .. .
a psychotic serial killer who loves to torture his victims by un speakable acts .. . . . . . .
Oh my... That is a ton of text..... Is that your handwriting? It looks really neat. Interesting so far, none the less. Have you considered breaking up your prologue into shorter pieces? Maybe 7 or 8 pages each?
This is a post apocalyptic story .
It focuses on the kingdom of EDONIA which was formed by the remnants of mankind after being nearly wiped out by demons 500 years ago . .. . . . .
This story centre focuses on Aaron , one of the 10 knights of THE ORDER who manintain peace within the land , who is hell bent on taking his revenge on the person responsible for his sisters murder . . . .
but little does he know that fate has something in store for him and also that he will be the solely responsible of either mankinds victory or its destruction . . . . . .
follow him as he takes a leap of fate into the unknowns . . . . . . .