Dethroned?
Jun 15, 2021
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Hey! I'm from the Tapas forums, just started reading.
If I can make any suggestions to the story, I'd maybe say split the narration from the dialogue tags? This is written in a sorta-script format, so maybe having the tags of what a character is doing be separated from the dialogue. Like, when it says that "The Creator stares as he looks intently at Judas." maybe have that be on a different break than the rest of his dialogue? Or maybe just more action descripting in general may be nice as well.
All in all though, not bad!
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