Fathers home
Jan 01, 2024
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Hi this is my first Novel so if you have any tips or pointers i'm open to them! :)
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I hope Alex is a friend! It sounds like Ryoku could use one!!
Your grammar is really good, but I think your writing could be clearer if you made a new paragraph each time a different person spoke (I hope that makes sense!) Also I've found that when you put internal thoughts into italics, it helps set them apart from regular dialogue or internal monologue <33
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