Got No Ticket To Ride (Part 1)
Oct 05, 2025
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Fortunately, Forge finally arrives at Reglom!!!!
Unfortunately, it won't be a very pleasant visit....
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The first paragraph has a big run-on sentence. You should cut it up into smaller sentences so it will be easier to read.
As for DEURMOD's first dialogue paragraph, his name should come after the first sentence so the audience will know who is talking. And when you do, a comma should come before the tag.
"We have arrived, Sir!!!!," said DEURMOD.
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