God
Sep 01, 2017
God is a human concept to calm the mind
So wrapped in society it feels like a bind
Their eyes not covered but yet are blind,
Hail the darkness in their eyes
For their soul will surely rise
That's for humans which I am not that
But you are that.
With eyes ever staring
A confused soul ever caring.
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I really enjoyed this piece!
I generally refrain from doing this, because I understand artists choose words to convey certain meanings, but if I might make a suggestion or two? My favorite line is 'Their eyes not covered but yet are blind,
Hail the darkness in their eyes' but I think the next line might flow a little bit better read 'For their souls surely will rise.' Following that, a slight alteration; 'That's for humanity which I'm not of,
But you are one.'
Hope to see more poetry from you, this is a really unique series!
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