Chapter 1: Page 11
Sep 23, 2017
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PAGES: 1, 2 ,3, 4, 5, 9, 11, 12 ARE REVISED.+ NEW INTRODUCTION.ETC
The Older Version Of Page 11: https://gyazo.com/7125b50c40acff12b1866c9c1bcd227b
I'm loving the newer version more! What do you guys think?
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*raises hand to teacher, pick me, pick me...I know why!* In the 1st panel, he mentions how that old coot gives him the creeps. I identified with that right away. Then 2nd panel you can see the guy running into the other main characters which gives you a better sense of location. And our main guy says, "There are people here." and so on and so on. You get more clarification of who is doing what and definite location. BUT you haven't lost any of your "zing" should I say? Luv'n both pages!
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