A Dream That Never Ends
Nov 20, 2024
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I've never really given feedback before, so I don't know how helpful I will be, but I'm going to try.
I always try to add some action to the description that makes it seem more real to me. I would write the part were she puts on the dress something like this.
The white dress, plain except for the purple flowers around my waist, swished around my knees and the purple lunar-shaped necklace around my neck was as heavy as the dream on my mind.
I wrote around three time though, so that is definitely not perfect.
Is there a reason it's in past tense? There is nothing wrong with that I'm just curious.
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