Echoes of the Past
Feb 02, 2025
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The way you build atmosphere and the characterization of Riddler and Trinity is very good. But I think your pacing suffers from the overuse of descriptions.
You also could pair the internal thoughts of Riddler with a few more actions to show rather than tell. This would make the text flow better.
Of course, this is my own opinion, but with a few of those improvements I believe you can enhance the reader's experience by a lot.
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