The Writer
Apr 26, 2022
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Your writing is good. The descriptions are nice and you paint a nice picture in this first chapter. To make this more readable, and to attract other readers, I would add spaces in-between each paragraph that starts a new idea or point. For example:
"Damn it!" This was so frustrating.
The exhaustion of getting in made me sick with worry. I had to get in. I had to be able to create. Tomorrow, I would walk through those doors....
I had already planned the story in my mind.
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Otherwise, great start. I'll read more tomorrow. :)
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