I have a few questions for anyone slaught enough to have read this far.

     I wrote this story breaking some common writing rules, such as rapidly breaking character POV during the scenes Skaarin and Lucrys are present in a single room, and changing the point of view during memories and mind ruptures to first-person, second-person, and so on.

     1.) Were these affects bothersome during reading, or did you find that they added to the experience? (Lucrys' mind is supposed to be confusing. But I don't want to leave you all disoriented or uninterested by the end.)

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     Also, I have two more parts planned before I'm finished with this project. By the end it should be a full-length novel. I have both parts planned out already and in the works. But I have A LOT of writing to do before either are completed. And, on top of that, editing before posting. (To the best of my current ability.)

     2.) Do you think I should finish the project? And if it were on shelves (after finishing the whole story, and much more editing, of course) would it be worth the buy?

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     3.) I've created a lot of characters for this story. So far, who's your favorite?

(Mine is totally Skaarin. His ass is rad af! I came to love his character once I watched him enter Lucrys' mind.)

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     I've been world-building KDamascuonj for over seven years with Hellvyre Ventalous. (Check out his Instagram on my account page, if you haven't. He drew Skaarin for me.)

     https://www.instagram.com/lord_ventalous/

     I have lore on the events that took place before this story. (Albeit, it's written the way I write lore, rather than as a story itself, but it still provides insight on KDamascuonj. More so on the area this story takes place.)

     4.) Would you like me to post the lore for this story in a separate "novel" post? It won't be anywhere near as long as this and will probably open questions of its own, but, being who I am, I'll need to keep people questioning SOME things.

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     If anyone goes back to reread earlier parts at some point, I think you'd enjoy it. There were some great moments of foreshadowing throughout Part One. Especially within Skaarin's dialogue. Almost anything you might still be confused about can be summed up from something he says. Almost.

     There are also a lot of connections between some events. Even some that might seem minuscule, but become extremely important, like Lucrys stopping to pet a flower on his way into the cells at the beginning of the story, or any of the scenes within Lucrys' mind.

     5.) Anyone notice something small that seems to really stand out now that Part One's up?

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     I started this story as a challenge for myself. My poetry was dark, but my stories weren't quite as dark, so I gave a character a name and a past and began to break him entirely.

     My college professor didn't like the idea of a delusional or insane main character, but I'd also created Skaarin and Latrus, and their backgrounds, so he let me give the story a shot. His challenge was if I could get people to care about Lucrys, then I was allowed to write the story.

     6.) Who thinks Lucrys, as torn as he is, could make a good protagonist to finish a story? (Argumentatively, he is human, and I think a character with human traits can create a good base for a story, no matter how their mind works. I'll probably finish this story despite opinions, but I'm still curious, nonetheless.)

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     Let me know your thoughts so far. Hope you're all enjoying this small piece of KDamascuonj. We have many plans for where it will go, but that future is far, far off from now.

     Thanks to anyone who's read this story so far. I was hopeful for feedback, and I've enjoyed what I've gotten up to now. If you have any feedback or anything you'd like to say, I'm really open to anything! And if you don't wanna say it publicly, a private message suits me just fine.

     All questions are welcome. I'll try to get back to people whenever I'm on this thread.

     Avlu'un,

     Lord Seriphus.