Story 4
Mar 23, 2015
Let me know if it's actually NSFW!
Man, this was a longer story than I expected.
To be honest, this a rewritten version of a story I wrote a while back. I wanted to see if and how I've advanced as a writer, and what better way than reworking your own narrative, yeah?
SunniDanni
Top comment
I expect, with the standard of entertainment now, this wouldn't really be considered NSFW. Maybe NSFK (not safe for kids) as maybe some of them don't like the idea of blood/killing. But work wise, which usually points to adults, totally ok.
I liked the development, the idea that at first, the killer had a purpose, almost vigilante, killing any woman who abused her child, and then it escalated to simply killing any woman who reminded him of his mother. Since your aim is a short story, the length was alright, but I would have preferred if more was described. The sensations, the breakdown, how the killer explained the change in targets to himself, to rationalise it...
But that's just me! Other than that, I liked it! As long as I'm not the one being killed. *never uses anything Lavendar scented ever again*
Recommendation for you
-
Recommendation
Long Exposure
LGBTQ+ 2.3m likes
-
Recommendation
Copper eyes
BL 1m likes
-
Recommendation
Humor me
Slice of life 2.9m likes
-
Recommendation
Domino Tower
BL 64.2k likes
-
Recommendation
Punderworld
Romance Fantasy 142.1k likes
-
Recommendation
Strange and Wild
BL 629.1k likes
-
Feeling lucky
Random series you may like
Comments (3)
See all