its warm in the woods
Sep 08, 2018
this comic was almost done before school started (a week ago) but i had been too busy to finish it until now
feels good to get a minicomic out of my system!
I'd love to hear any critique anyone has on this ! i really tried to challenge myself and i think it turned out. pretty decently !!
Tuaterra
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The art in this is really nice with a distinct style (though the pose in the second panel could use some work). Colours are very nice as well and brings it to life, I especially love how the bright orange of the door contrasts with the surroundings. The writing is also fine.
The only minor problem I have is that it's just a neat concept, not really much more. It feels like something that would be apart of a bigger story so there's just not much to chew on here.
To improve the short story you could maybe find ways to explore the potential of the concept. Maybe use it to explore the temptation of mystery/curiosity of man, give us a little tie in to something significant about the world it's in or make a more compelling character to explore the idea.
The character you have now is fine, it's actually a very appealing character design but he doesn't do much. From his looks he just seems to walk around a lot and look tired, it adds little to the story. Maybe use a messenger delivering a scroll to show how tempting that lust of discovery is to pull people out of focus without needing to add many more panels. Speaking of panels maybe it would be good to add a few more to show the thought process of the traveller through his mannerisms; his doubts, his worries, his imagination running wild, things to help us relate to him so we can put ourselves in his shoes. Don't get me wrong, that last close up of his face does do that and is probably the best panel in the story but I feel like it could have used a bit more like that.
Also, personal touch, I wouldn't have shown him walking into the door. I think it would have been better to just show us the door but with one or several sets of footprints leading up to it and stopping in front of it to give it a more ominous vibe.
Overall I'd say it's good but it didn't really go beyond that and I think that trying to increase the depth of your comics is the next best step for you as a comic/story creator. Sorry for the long critique.
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