Boxes of goodies
May 22, 2015
Spark's been busy with the credit card.
Abba Studios
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You should avoid having characters disappear as the dragon does in the second panel. I finally saw the piece of green. But finding him takes the reader out of the story. Keep your storytelling clear. Once the reader asks a question like, "Where is the dragon?" when it should be there, is not good storytelling. If you want the dragon behind the box, then there needs to be a transitional panel showing him walking behind the boxes.
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