Just read through all of chapter 1 and I'm liking the style. Here's stuff I thought about, keeping track of the story might be a lil hard for me cuz I'm like that, I don't get why the dude says "This is why people think he's a girl" because he's crying or whining I think , crying is a normal thing for people, Police Chief Dan has an intro and maybe I missed it but our two main characters don't have one? Just a small inconsistency and I think that's all. Again tho nonetheless I am liking this story being made so far and keep up good the work :D
Once Upon a Time there was a city named H-Ville. It was a strange city who’s become infamous for its seemingly strange news reports of supernatural sightings.
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