SO, this is a one shot then. I hate that because this is really interesting. This is really good, but your prologue and the start of your story is a bit jarring. I think you need a title page there, something to state the name of your story, and to also put a Transition from your prologue and your actual story.
One thousand years ago, the infamous MAO Akuto begun the first Great Magical War and plunged the world into chaos. However, before he could truly conquer the world, five brave sages stepped up and defeated him, bringing about peace in the world. In the present day, Mamoru Kido, a troubled boy ostracized by the world, aims to become the next MAO and finish the work of his predecessor.
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