Chapter 1, page 9
Oct 16, 2015
Is.. is it ok to be on time? D:
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Nice! Poor Marcos must really be late often... xD
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I think the third panel is a little awkward in that the furniture has become ver abastract: it would be nice to add a foreground, with the table behind Marcos (and possibly the students sitting there, to give a sensation that the room is more crowded than before as everybody arrived). It would also be wort it to move the teacher a bit further to the right so the bottom part of her body isn't entirely hidden by the chair, to make it easier for the eye to figure behind which piece of furniture she stands. Lastly, if we had some students in the foreground, the welcome speech bubble could point to them. Here it stands a bit alone and the eye doesn't know who is speaking. If the students are not showing, it might be better to place the bubble as some kind of onomatopoeia, like general sound from the classroom.
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