Chapter 1 - Page 44
Sep 15, 2020
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Okay, so I've just read all your episodes so far. I have to say, the whole dynamic of Sara's family is actually very interesting to read about. Your comic kind of reminds me of an awesome episode from The Loud House, one where they introduce the large family of Ronnie Anne Santiago, a latina character in the show. I also appreciate that the animal-based characters are interspersed with the fully human-looking characters, but everyone still treats and talks to each other normally despite the vastly different appearances. It really drives home that mixed family feel, which I adore.
Story-wise, I like that you have an engaging mystery with regards to Sara's late great grandpa, but I can't help but feel like you've maybe focused a little too much on the family dynamic and problems, and not enough on the motivation aspect of the story. You did a good job setting the mystery up, and I'm glad that Sara is getting on with the adventure, but you haven't quite shown WHY Sara cares about the mysterious item they want to find. I understand she's unhappy with the move, and with her arguments with her big brother, but how does that translate to "I want to find this mysterious object my late great grandpa hid in my talking bag"? I hope you address that in a future episode.
Other than that, I really like your story! I subbed, and I hope to read more from you soon!
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