Chapter 1 ( pg. 13-16 )
May 30, 2021
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THAT'S CHAPTER ONE FOLKS!!! pls leave a comment on wat you think about it so far or critiques ^_^ doesn't matter if it's bad or good idc be as mean as you want even, i want to know what and how i can improve so i can make chapter 2 better 👍👍
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The story is pretty solid, you get a good idea of the main character's childhood, their hobbies, etc. But, I think the pacing is too fast. Things happen right after one another, and sometimes you just need a few panels to space those out, just so the reader isn't thrown into another scene right away.
The text bubbles are also very big and tend to clutter and compete with the illustrations a lot.
This one's just a nit-pick but instead of a character saying "WTF", you should spell it out- this is just a me thing but it helps make the dialogue feel more natural.
Other than that, WICKED STYLE! Your comic really sticks out amongst the other comics and that's really good!! I hope this helps at least a little :)
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