I like what I see so far. The story seems interesting enough. At first, I thought it might start out like a battle royale setting, but in that case, it would be of no use for anyone to go to the psychiatrist after the competition. I actually don't find it too hard to read so far, I had expected worse after you mentioned that. The character boxes are fine as well, but I'd suggest creating a tableau or glossary or something like that. That way reader could look up information faster between the chapters as there is a lot of information giving about numerous persons all at once. I probably didn't memorize half of it in the first read.
Eloise Cassé, the 50th richest person in the world, comes up with a new, revolutionary idea that could revive the television industry. 20 sick people has to compete for the cure in a live TV show.
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