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Jun 06, 2022
Now that the introduction chapter is over, chapter two and onward I'm gonna TRY to do character cards at the end of the chapter that include information that you learn about each character in that chapter as well as some bounce info that doesn't really get said.
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Heyy, I have some constructive criticism:
I had some difficulties to follow the story so far... had to read it twice, and only in the end I understood who Bryce is xD
Too many characters, all togheter, all too similar to each other. I see you've tried to distinguish them by giving different colors to the hair, shirts and balloons... but is still confusing.
Also the absence of any background doesn't help. I know, making the same background elements over and over again is a pain... but without any spacial element, is impossible to understand where the characters are positioned when they talk with each other.
Hope you don't find this criticisms bothering.
Byeee
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