The gangsters confront Rose about the commotion she caused, threatening to kill her. Alexandre intervened by throwing a bottle at the club's sound system, giving Rose time to snatch the gangster's gun and shoot at them. She was ready to fight.
I really love it when you add more information in your Artist Comments. I wonder if you're able to insert some of the into the character's thoughts so it can lead me (the reader) into the action and more into the characters' personalities.
You did fantastic with the gangsters--their thoughts and action were expressed very well.
Maybe with Alexander getting ready to throw the bottle, we can hear his thoughts of his concern over Rose being in the line of fire.
Maybe your not doing this is your style? But it's just an observation.
To tell you the truth, I don't like giving advice or opinions to creators of their comics because it could cause discouragement or backlash. However, in your case, I think it'll be something you can think about--accept or not accept. Still, your story is wonderful! :) Keep up the fantastic work!
*Before diving into the story, read the prologue comic Black Rose: The Budding of a Rose! *
In 1986, Rose experienced death after being slain by a vile vampire. Given another opportunity, she is revived by God as the bold "Black Rose." With her newfound power, The Black Rose embarks on a quest to vanquish the wicked and evil men committing atrocious crimes. She is driven to aid other victims of such heinous acts, all while wrestling her own spiritual warfare. Yet, must she face this fight alone?
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