Prologue
Aug 24, 2024
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I think some things could be improved here. For instance, the opening "Huff" "Hah" "Huff" should be italicised, since they are sound effects rather than dialogue. Secondly, the writing needs to be more detailed and descriptive. Some sentences require proper punctuation, viz. a full stop at the end of certain sentences, a dash between "princess" and "style" and perhaps an exclamation mark at the end of "put me down." These are but a few of the examples which I would list as needing to be improved.
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