She'd be Ashamed
Sep 10, 2017
I'm back ladies and gents!!
Hero of Grimland
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CRITIQUE: Without a shadow of a doubt your artstyle is phenomenal! It is very colorful and pretty and you portray your character's emotions excellently. However, your frames a bit repetitive. The frames mostly have the same profile shots, their upper torso/head. I think it would be best to mix it up and add more perspective to the characters and their conversations. For example, making them face one another in one frame, or showing another angle of the character in another. You did experiment with this in the upper frames, but it looks a bit flat. I am not telling you this to make fun of you in any way, in fact, the reason I am doing this is because I truly believe in this comic and its potential, and I am eager to see how the later updates will turn out!
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