Joined Dec 2015
I'm a writer and artist with a passion. I love long and sophisticated romances. Je parle francais aussi mais je n'ai pas de clavier en francais alors excusez-moi.
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My computer and traditional art.
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UPDATE PREDATOR LURKING IN THE WATER
Ugghh my writing is so bland and I have stories but I have no idea how to write them. Help wanted.
It's hard to describe. I want to help me make my flow sound better? Instead of saying like "He walked," I want to be able to do something like "Long legs strode past one another in a hurried manner..."
Im just not feeling it you know? I have so many stories but it's hard to force myself to write.
I can understand that. Trying to sit down and find the will to write can be hard. Thats something that will come with patience and motivation. Like if you were to sit down to work on one part of a certain story, and have your good friend google give you word suggestions to help you to turn sentences into more than a two liner.
The thing is I know a lot of words. I just never know when to use them lol. I've studied over a thousand words these past three years and they just hide somewhere in my mind
Thank you very much for commenting. You're too kind <3
I honestly don't know if anyone will respond to this, but I appreciate it if anyone would. I would like feedback for my stories, because as of now, I become really lost when I write.
Just an opinion, or what you like or dislike would be good. Thank you :). Is the pacing ok? That's my biggest concern.
Oh for sure pacing was good. But I cannot for the life of me think of the details this early i the morning
Don't worry about it. Just update me about your thoughts whenever. :)
I've been reading Predator too, and I think it has potential, and you have a good way with words sometimes, like somewhere you wrote that a room smelled of "dust and melancholy", I liked it! As for suggestion, I don't know if you're familiar with the "Show, don't tell" concept--if not, there's plenty of books and articles online that explain it better than I could; I think your writing could really benefit if you switch from telling to showing where possible, it helps to make the story more engaging for the reader. Good luck, I think you can get go far with your writing if you keep at it!
I understand what you mean by "show don't tell," unfortunately for me, I have a hard time picturing how to write that. I'll make sure to look that up! Thank you! I'm pretty sure what makes stories so good is the unspoken parts.
I need to figure out days when I need to update...does anyone have suggestions?
I'M AN ARTIST TOO. ACCEPTING COMMISSIONS AT THE MOMENT. NOT EXPENSIVE.
