Family
Mar 27, 2020
A young woman joins a group of adventurers, and learns what it means to be one of them.
Lunarsun
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Woah, your artstyle is amazing, but this is a bit of a mess.
You start off showing an amazing scene of a place ....that we have no clue where it is. (A Narrative box would help here) You move on to the end of a conversation that the next panel does a better job describing what had happen. Then you go on and introduce the characters, in a much better fashion then the Narrative introduction that two of the main character (one is Alejandra) got.
Then you introduce a problem, and still haven't changed the fact that we still have very little idea of what is going on.
Why is Alejandra joining this group? What is this group? What is this place? This confusion happens in just the first few panels, and then you move downwards to Alejandra saving the captain, and you never really saw him in danger.
I had to literally go back and look. Once again, your artwork is amazing. Each of your character are really well drawn, and your perspective for each scene looks like a real comic book. It's just the transistion of your scenes are quite choppy. I would love to see you continued this. It has the potential to be really interesting.
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